Peer feedback guidelines.

Thanks Owen for these guidelines I can see you have put lots of hard work into this.  

We will use the guidelines for the next essay which you need to post by Wednesday 23 October.  I am out with the year 11 on fieldwork this week so please use the class time on Thursday 24 October to peer review the essay using the guidelines.

Marking Other Work:

4 good areas , one area for improvement (each grade criteria)

It is okay to give 2 good things and one improvement, as long as it adheres to the 4:1 ratio.

Bad comments:

“Very good essay” is not a good comment

Giving only negative comments is not a good way of giving feedback

Short and brief comments are not a way for them to improve

Good comments:

The sentence is relevant___________

This point is interesting because__________

I disagree with this point____________

I had never thought of_________

I was not aware of _________study

Skills for marking:

-        Read the intro and the conclusion first!

-        Reword the question using extended description of command terms

-        Vocab – highlight key terms used

-        PEEL – by looking at the first and last sentence of a paragraph , we can see what the paragraph is about “I knew what you were talking about via your first and last sentence” or  “the first and last sentence didn’t help me understand your paragraph because…….”

Examples of protocols from Peer Marking:

PEEL:

-         Topic sentences (from intro) etc demographic dividend

-        Linking the point with the question you are talking about

-        Evidence , statistics

-        Explanation to develop points

Reword Question:

-        general points that you will talk about

-        description of the command terms

-        Nitin’s: “assumption and interrelationships” has defined the question

-        look at the IB geography guide

Sentence structures:

-        “it is going to be very difficult just about impossible for China, now to correct” <- this is good because it gives a different view on optimum population not just decreasing population

Skills:

-        clearly states what Essay is about (in intro)

-        good summary in conclusion

-        the introduction gets the ball rolling

Vocabulary:

-        make a list of relevant command terms

-        highlight the command terms ( control f)

-        if the term is only found in one area , that is not good ,they need to be spread out

Tim’s Essay (marked by Hei Yin): 

   Skills: This essay will consider the concept of Chinas anti-natal policy in a way that uncovers assumptions & interrelationships.

   Command terms:

-        population momentum

-        demographic dividend

-        ageing population

Owen’s Essay (marked by Kristian)

4:1 Ratio: There is a good understanding of this situation, you have talked about the one child policy and an ageing population in depth. Social, environmental and economic impacts have been talked about well in the essay. You need to talk more in depth about the epidemiological transition and how it affects China.